Tuesday 15 September 2015

Describing a moment in time

Please listen to these pheneomenal descriptions by Kanishka and Clarice.

We would appreciate it if you could leave a comment to tell us how we could improve our descriptions.

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3 comments:

  1. Hi Kanishka and Clarice,
    We enjoyed reading and listening to your writing. We think you could add some similes to paint a picture in your readers minds.

    Keep up the fantastic work,

    Morris Class

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    1. Thank you for the awesome feedback Morris Class.

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  2. HI
    I love your work Kanishka it is really good and the book in to the forest it is a grate story.I think you have been working hard.Maybe you could start at the beginning of the story.
    from Faisal

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Thank you for your positive, thoughtful and helpful comment.